fantastically sexy, this! i love your straight-ahead prose, it's minimal with its gestures when it needs to be without sparing anything by way of atmosphere and emotion.
the hotness: - rafa, naked and dripping wet. EEP. - sex as an idea and possibility coming into the room like a third character - rafa the enthusiastic giver of loud head! (sounds like a rather inappropriate super-hero or something, eh?) - "White smeared at the corner of Rafa's mouth, on his chin, down his neck. Roger stared down at him and panted." - this was fiery hot, this use of just "white," no noun at all - "In the locker room, he was confronted by an explosion of Rafa's gear." there was something orgasmic about this right from the start.
yowsers, it was good. as are all your other stories.
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Date: 2008-10-17 03:52 am (UTC)the hotness:
- rafa, naked and dripping wet. EEP.
- sex as an idea and possibility coming into the room like a third character
- rafa the enthusiastic giver of loud head! (sounds like a rather inappropriate super-hero or something, eh?)
- "White smeared at the corner of Rafa's mouth, on his chin, down his neck. Roger stared down at him and panted." - this was fiery hot, this use of just "white," no noun at all
- "In the locker room, he was confronted by an explosion of Rafa's gear." there was something orgasmic about this right from the start.
yowsers, it was good. as are all your other stories.