Right now I'm damned tired, but I know that I'll forget what I want to comment if I put this off for later (forgive my mistakes and typos, they multiply when I'm sleepy).
I totally loved your incredible ability to make us understand how everybody is feeling without mentioning it once. With the old-lady bag, for example. It was so easy to put oneself in Hakkai's shoes...! Or the morning after Hakkai's first experience in the couch. Everything so clear without overtly saying it... that's talent.
I especially loved the sentence:You just sit here getting weirder and weirder, or what?, it made me laugh out loud.
And the final scene with Sanzo seemed directly taken out of the manga, I really loved it.
Maybe I would have liked a bit more of Hakkai/Gojyo evolution at the end, some settling of things between them after the sex (not declarations of undying love, but some kind of closing the frame or tying of loose ends, I don't know how to explain), but that's because I'm a 58 junkie, even if that makes me conventional.
All in all, a wonderful reading. Please, don't leave the fandoooooooooom!!!!!!!
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Date: 2009-02-24 09:39 pm (UTC)Right now I'm damned tired, but I know that I'll forget what I want to comment if I put this off for later (forgive my mistakes and typos, they multiply when I'm sleepy).
I totally loved your incredible ability to make us understand how everybody is feeling without mentioning it once. With the old-lady bag, for example. It was so easy to put oneself in Hakkai's shoes...! Or the morning after Hakkai's first experience in the couch. Everything so clear without overtly saying it... that's talent.
I especially loved the sentence:You just sit here getting weirder and weirder, or what?, it made me laugh out loud.
And the final scene with Sanzo seemed directly taken out of the manga, I really loved it.
Maybe I would have liked a bit more of Hakkai/Gojyo evolution at the end, some settling of things between them after the sex (not declarations of undying love, but some kind of closing the frame or tying of loose ends, I don't know how to explain), but that's because I'm a 58 junkie, even if that makes me conventional.
All in all, a wonderful reading. Please, don't leave the fandoooooooooom!!!!!!!